雅思寫作素材:犯罪類話題寫作思路
時間:2021-09-24
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2018年3月3日考題
In most countries, prisons are the most common solution for the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with better education so that they do not become criminals. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
首先,prison 和 better education 都是有效的;其次,再問問你的心,到底哪個更有效?多數人會覺得是 better education 吧。
參考思路
長遠看來,better education 更有效;
但是針對一些 better education 無法改善的人,仍然需要 prison.
即prison 是 better education 的補充
主體段的展開:
1. 為什么 better education 更有效
2. better education 無法改善的人是誰
開頭段
【Opinions differ on the extent to which incarceration deals effectively with crime as opposed to improving the quality of education.】 My view is that there will always be a role for prisons in confining evil people, but better education is more likely to reduce crime levels.
必須有【……】部分的信息,才算回答問題。
主體段1:討論 prison 的作用
黑體部分為主題句,告訴讀者這一段你要寫什么。
1) 犯了謀殺罪等重罪的大量囚犯,靠防止犯罪的教育來改變他們,已經太遲了。保護人們不受他們的傷害,比釋放他們并指望通過教育來改造他們,更重要。
2) 有些人無論接受了多少教育,都會選擇犯罪。很多白領犯罪,比如詐騙,就是需要高智商的人才能設計出來的。
Nevertheless, improvements to education would, in my view, be a better means of reducing the number of people who want to commit crime in the long-term. Acquiring more useful knowledge especially when young would provide greater opportunities for entry into satisfying careers. Further education opens up new possibilities in terms of developing healthy interests and participating in worthwhile activities such as sports and hobbies. Better education would achieve improved outcomes such as a proficiency in a sport rather than just a passing interest. The more people achieve personal goals in terms of their careers or hobbies, the more people will find meaning in life and thus not be tempted to use their talents in illegal ways.
1) 獲取更多有用的知識,尤其在年輕的時候,會給人帶去更大的機會,進入體面的職業。
2) 中學后的深造,為人們培養健康的興趣和參加有意義的活動,提供了新的可能性。
3) 更好的教育能帶來更好的結果,比如對某項運動轉瞬即逝的興趣變成了熟練。
越多的人在職業和愛好方面達到了目標,就有越多的人找到生命的意義,因此不會被誘惑將自己的才華運用到違法的事情上。
結尾段
In conclusion, I acknowledge the place that imprisonment will have in protecting society from serious offenders who have already committed crimes. 【However crime levels are more likely to fall more drastically over the longer term by reason of improvement to education.】
【……】部分,再次給出觀點,這才叫做觀點。
